Mid-Term Assignment - Ways of Reading- Swati
Yadav
Line break poems
Write two poems where each poem has at
least two deliberate line-breaks using any of the "Wagner’s six S’s:
speed, sound, syntax, surprise, sense, and space." In a small note after
each poem, explain your usages of these line-breaks.
Death
Death is
so calm,
Death has
all I want.
The idea bewitches
me inside out.
Prospect
to thrive in the afterlife,
Through
the characters I have read alive.
If wish
be; then the wish be granted:
Mirror my
soul to me;
If faded/
It may be:
Colour it,
with the life still within me.
Yes
traveller/
As I am.
I wish to
travel life,
I wish to
admire world with different sight,
I wish if
death- invites.
NOTE: I have put the slash in the two
places where I have given the deliberate line breaks. First line break is given
to give more sense to the thought the poem wants to convey. Also it works as a
kind of assertion and opens a new possibility. The Second line break is given
to give both surprise and space in the poem. As after reading that line the
poem takes a different tone. Also before this particular line break the poem
was more like a sad self-talk. But after this it changes its tone.
My colour red
Stimulating
were my thoughts and dreams,
But red
was the colour,
Missing.
I had a
dream,
That dream
had me along/
With you
within.
When my
heart was meteoric and my mind numb.
When my
lower limbs wanted to say/
To stay,
But my
finger’s wanted to pave a way.
It was
then, when my dream proclaimed:
It is you
– my red colour on your way.
NOTE: The first line break is given to add
a different sound and space in the poem. At the same time it is hinting towards
the different sense. The second line break is given again for sound and space.
Mythological poems
Write two poems, each in the voice of any
historical or mythological character of your choice. You may want to choose a
particular moment in that character's life and attempt to explore how they
would respond to that moment.
To her
If
I could ever be her best,
If I could
ever be her select,
To be more
precise – if I could ever be her first select.
These are
the thoughts which dread my mind day and night.
What, what
if one day she does not reconcile?
What, what
if she pushes me aside?
To be more
precise – what, what if she pushes me forever aside?
Wait... Wait…….
Let me give it a thought…
Have I
ever been her first morning thought?
I wish, I
wish if I could ever peel inside her mind.
And ask
her heart to give away the weeds in my name from her mind.
As I am
dead.
NOTE: My poem “To her” is about the
thoughts Karan from Mahabharata felt for Draupadi, but he was never able to
confess his feeling for her. The poem is kind of a self-talk he is having, as
he nears his death in the field. The thought of this poem is influenced from
the book “the palace of illusion”.
Draupadi
Knock
knock.
It has
been talked about since my days.
But this
time I hope you actually hear.
Knock
knock, it is about rape.
Since the
days of nursery I am draped in fragile pink.
The choice
was never mien, but this is how it was meant to be.
Oooh
pretty little girl keep your hands off the mud and those current carrying
wires. Ooooh pretty little girl did you get hurt?
Yes I was
hurts.
Why did
you not think, if the pretty girl who was no more little, was hurt, when you
ripped off her dress and thrust inside her without any rest.
You
return, thinking it was your right.
The pink
colour choice was never mien, then how can I expect you to ask me if I wanted
to join.
The rapes
have been happening, and the people have convinced themselves that it was she
who asked for it.
Did her
walk, her talk, her short skirt, her visible breast, her red lipstick, her open
hair, her clothes layers, her curvy waist ask for being raped?
Oooooh
pretty girl. You in full sleeves clothes, hair in braid and flat chest have
also been raped.
oo.. h
pretty girl you will be raped even in the saree you drape.
Even by
the five on your side and even by those hundred on the other side.
NOTE: This poem is the voice of Draupadi
herself. She is analysing that how just like her so many girls have to suffer
at the hands of men. In the poem she is addressing people from all age group
and is trying to convey her message.
Repetition poems
Write two poems, each using repetition of
a word or a phrase. Think of our classroom discussion where we realized how
repetition achieves different effects, whether it be lending weight, creating
irony, exploring multiple meanings of the same word or phrase, among others.
I Want
I
want
I want
more than what they call a girl is.
What they
have called a girl to be,
Is not
what a girl seems to me.
I want to
be a girl but not the kind they have
Decided
for me to be.
The one
who is quite,
Calm in
turmoil,
Mum all
the while,
Never asks
why,
Despite
she has suffered to much harm all the while.
I do not
want the life they have decided for me.
Neither do
I want what life has decided for me,
But I want
the life my heart throbs to live and my mind dreams all night.
And even in the daylight.
What if songs.
Last
night, while I lay thinking here,
Some, what
if’s crawled into my ear.
Thinking
it all night long
I sang the,
what if songs.
What if I
am dumb at school?
What if I
get beaten up?
What if
there is poison in my cup?
Is my
neighbour going to call for ambulance?
Or just
leave saying what if he is already dead.
So, it is none
of my business.
What if I
start crying in the mid of the night?
Will my
parents be worried, or will they leave me,
To sort it
all by myself.
What if I
flunk that test?
A test
should not affect my life, but
What if it
does?
What if
everybody likes me?
How will I
decide whom do I like?
Should I
just go and talk to all of them,
Only to
find out that I like non- of them.
What if I
don’t grow taller?
Would he
like to walk with me, or
I will
have to go, do all the stuff myself.
What if my
head starts getting smaller?
I hope
that’s not a disease and there is a pill to regrow it.
What if
the bus is late?
Should I
wait for another one, or
Ask a
stranger to drop me at work?
What if I
lose everything?
Will I be
able to sit down and think?
Where did
it all go wrong?
What if I
had wanted to go to heaven and god said No?
What if
tomorrow is no more?
It should
not matter, because every time I say it,
My mom
wakes me up the next morning.
And my
what if’s move for the
Remaining
hours of the night,
Making
more situations in the daylight.
Swati, I really loved your poem 'My color red'. One could read it time and again. The manner in which you link up the color, which is considered the color of love, is so precise and beautiful at the same time. The poem ''What If songs" is very well conveyed. I really liked the line ''Some, what if’s crawled into my ear'' which aptly portrays the situation in the poem! Also one can see that you don't want to break or combine the lines except that in the poem "Draupadi". So is it a deliberate act of creating space between each line?
ReplyDeleteIn a nutshell, great efforts! :)
hey yaa, i loved you poetry, the way you write is amazing, arrangement of words and thoughts is just on pint. i loved your two poems in particular 1)'DEATH' 2)'DRAUPADI'. two of these are so beautifully written that it strikes the heart directly, i would love to read more of your poems, keep writing.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem"I want" very much and "Draupadi", which represents the reality of the mentality of the people who love following the so called "traditions" (which is in reality an excuse)
ReplyDeleteGood job!
I liked your poem"I want" very much and "Draupadi", which represents the reality of the mentality of the people who love following the so called "traditions" (which is in reality an excuse)
ReplyDeleteGood job!
i liked you poem what if, it somehow could encapsulate the anxieties of a teenager.
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